01 / un:parfaitgirl

[parfaitgirl]

[ A post appears on the network -- it's just a picture, of some writing in a notebook. Nothing else. Perhaps the handwriting or the style might remind you of another poem you read some time ago ... ]

Comments

text | un: synagogue

[motherfucking_ghost]

wtf is this
it doesnt even ryme all the way
how can the mug be perf if the handles too small n its awkward n its ugly
also if u broke it then shuldnt it be had a fav mug or does that destroy the dramatic tension

un: swordfish

[menarefrom]

with all you poets around here I'll never have to buy a book again.

text | un: yamaneko

[snyaiper]

maybe you should keep your opinions to yourself
maybe you don't know what you're talking about
also, learn how to spell, moron.

[Ogata didn't even write the poem why is he so defensive??]

[motherfucking_ghost]

ill use spellcheck when this person learns 2 poem
or like learns to keep poetry to themself
and it doesnt ryme all the way thru the last one doesnt have one in it at all not even internal rythm

[snyaiper]

poems don't have to rhyme
you'd know that if you knew anything about poetry

[Do you, Ogata??]

[motherfucking_ghost]

it starts with a rhym scheme [really church you're gonna do this you're gonna be too lazy to spell rhyme when it's right in front of you but you'll hit scheme out of the park i fucking hate you] but then ends it in the last verse
n maybe its indictiv of a bigger message abt the idk futility of giving a shit abt an ugly mug but in that cast it feels
lame

[and then a few moments later] shit are there kids here
this is a kiddy poem isnt it
some kid shared kiddos first poem wanting praise from the cool adults right
almost feel bad abt it now

[parfaitgirl]

how are you gonna tell me what a good poem is supposed to have when you can't even spell lol
also, it's a metaphor, stupid

[parfaitgirl]

are you making fun of me or is that a compliment

[snyaiper]

[Church really went on a fucking journey there, huh.]

What do you mean "are there kids here"? We've been here for weeks now. Are you really so unobservant that you don't know?
I'd like to see you do better if you think you can do better than this
you're so caught up on the rhyming you completely missed the point of the poem

[motherfucking_ghost]

i mean r there kids here dude like yeah theres animal people kids but are there rpg quest kids here
lolllll who said i wrote poetry cuz i didnt
ok shakespear whats the point or did i hurt ur feefees

[menarefrom]

I can see why that might need to be clarified.

Compliment, I promise.

[motherfucking_ghost]

nobodys ever heard of texting around here cool im not writing academic papers
oooo is it a metaphor for life
n how it sux
mega deep

[menarefrom]

Plenty of highly recognized poets break rhyme scheme.
Then there's translated poems, too.

un: jdenvH8r82

[rockymountaindie]

Hey dude
I agree with yamaneko, you're being really mean here
Sure I'm not great at poetry but if someone took the time to write this and put it on here you could do better than just be an internet troll

un: dearsunshine; text

[hxppythxughts]

OMGGG this is beautiful!!! i love it!!! (●♡∀♡))ヾ☆*。u did such a good job i cant stop reading it!!!

and i think i get it!
i feel like
i used to have a mug like that too u know?

un: dearsunshine; text

[hxppythxughts]

why are u being so mean?

[snyaiper]

There's a whole mess of teenagers. And besides that, did you forget about our erstwhile boy detective so quickly?

[Yeah Church how could you forget about ANGUS?]

Obviously it's about how some things that seem terrible could actually become useful and cared for. But they never last.

[motherfucking_ghost]

they could do better than putting it on here join a lit club r something i didnt sign up for poem club on my not phone

[motherfucking_ghost]

youve yet 2 see me b mean
annoying aparently
frustrating mayb

[motherfucking_ghost]

sure but theyve got nothing on bofa

[menarefrom]

bofa?????

[hxppythxughts]

it seems mean to me to make fun of sth that someone worked hard on and put their feelings into

[rockymountaindie]

None of us really signed up for anything here, that's true
But I think a nice poem's a good pick me up?
Like seriously, don't like don't read

[motherfucking_ghost]

who
[give him a moment]
memory relic artifact detective guy oh is he a teen kid or something too how tf am i supposed to no that
fugly mug being useful cuz its the only last minute clean mug left doesnt speak highly of it n there are always more mugs tho like
get a new one
n if it seemed terrible at first then why give a fuck if its gone tho
like get rid of it if it sux so bad in the first place

[motherfucking_ghost]

bofa deez nutz