01 / un:parfaitgirl

[parfaitgirl]

[ A post appears on the network -- it's just a picture, of some writing in a notebook. Nothing else. Perhaps the handwriting or the style might remind you of another poem you read some time ago ... ]

Comments

text | un: synagogue

[motherfucking_ghost]

wtf is this
it doesnt even ryme all the way
how can the mug be perf if the handles too small n its awkward n its ugly
also if u broke it then shuldnt it be had a fav mug or does that destroy the dramatic tension

text | un: yamaneko

[snyaiper]

maybe you should keep your opinions to yourself
maybe you don't know what you're talking about
also, learn how to spell, moron.

[Ogata didn't even write the poem why is he so defensive??]

[motherfucking_ghost]

ill use spellcheck when this person learns 2 poem
or like learns to keep poetry to themself
and it doesnt ryme all the way thru the last one doesnt have one in it at all not even internal rythm

[snyaiper]

poems don't have to rhyme
you'd know that if you knew anything about poetry

[Do you, Ogata??]

[motherfucking_ghost]

it starts with a rhym scheme [really church you're gonna do this you're gonna be too lazy to spell rhyme when it's right in front of you but you'll hit scheme out of the park i fucking hate you] but then ends it in the last verse
n maybe its indictiv of a bigger message abt the idk futility of giving a shit abt an ugly mug but in that cast it feels
lame

[and then a few moments later] shit are there kids here
this is a kiddy poem isnt it
some kid shared kiddos first poem wanting praise from the cool adults right
almost feel bad abt it now

[snyaiper]

[Church really went on a fucking journey there, huh.]

What do you mean "are there kids here"? We've been here for weeks now. Are you really so unobservant that you don't know?
I'd like to see you do better if you think you can do better than this
you're so caught up on the rhyming you completely missed the point of the poem

[motherfucking_ghost]

i mean r there kids here dude like yeah theres animal people kids but are there rpg quest kids here
lolllll who said i wrote poetry cuz i didnt
ok shakespear whats the point or did i hurt ur feefees

[snyaiper]

There's a whole mess of teenagers. And besides that, did you forget about our erstwhile boy detective so quickly?

[Yeah Church how could you forget about ANGUS?]

Obviously it's about how some things that seem terrible could actually become useful and cared for. But they never last.

[menarefrom]

Plenty of highly recognized poets break rhyme scheme.
Then there's translated poems, too.

[motherfucking_ghost]

sure but theyve got nothing on bofa

[menarefrom]

bofa?????

un: dearsunshine; text

[hxppythxughts]

why are u being so mean?

[motherfucking_ghost]

youve yet 2 see me b mean
annoying aparently
frustrating mayb

[hxppythxughts]

it seems mean to me to make fun of sth that someone worked hard on and put their feelings into

[parfaitgirl]

how are you gonna tell me what a good poem is supposed to have when you can't even spell lol
also, it's a metaphor, stupid

[motherfucking_ghost]

nobodys ever heard of texting around here cool im not writing academic papers
oooo is it a metaphor for life
n how it sux
mega deep

un: jdenvH8r82

[rockymountaindie]

Hey dude
I agree with yamaneko, you're being really mean here
Sure I'm not great at poetry but if someone took the time to write this and put it on here you could do better than just be an internet troll

[motherfucking_ghost]

they could do better than putting it on here join a lit club r something i didnt sign up for poem club on my not phone

[rockymountaindie]

None of us really signed up for anything here, that's true
But I think a nice poem's a good pick me up?
Like seriously, don't like don't read

[motherfucking_ghost]

bruh first thing ive ever seen on this thing of corse im gonna see wtf it is
didnt exactly come w any like description or warning or anything just heres this thing

un: eudaimonikos

[eudaimonikos]

[Well, Michael's instincts are telling him that this poem business is absolutely embarrassing and that he should 100% join in on bullying the poet...but he can feel the echo of Alex's indignation in the back of his mind. He may not care much about anyone, but he doesn't want to upset Alex. He has a feeling that that would........feel bad.]

So what's your actual problem? Don't like that someone else was confident in their work?

[motherfucking_ghost]

well first it was that its a shit poem i didnt ask 4 but now its that every1 else things its the gr8test thing 2 ever be written
starting to think im gettin pranked actually

un: PAPYRUS

[spaghettimonster]

MAYBE YOU DIDN'T...
OR MAYBE WE ALL SIGNED UP FOR POEM CLUB, AND FORGOT! OH NO!
THANK GOODNESS PARFAITGIRL IS HERE TO SAVE IT.

un: yamaneko

[snyaiper]

why is your text different from everyone elses

[parfaitgirl]

why should i tell you? you're being a huge jerk for no reason